The Valley

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 I’m stuck, no way out. My brother Caden and I should have never came out here. I was driving, we were going. There are millions of thoughts going through my mind, “Renee you mess everything up, you should have told your brother this was not safe running away from home like this.” Then our car broke down, what are we supposed to do there is no Triple A in the middle of no where. What if we can’t get out of this valley. We have little food and water, and a prisoner just escaped today.  I will not let my brother get hurt. What if we die? I see a car coming down the road maybe it’s our parents, maybe it’s Triple A, or maybe it’s the escape prisoner, I really don’t know but soon I will find out.

I’ll leave the ending up to you, my viewers. This is the beginning of my story, unfortunately the characters trip has gone wrong. I would love for my viewers to finish my story, in the comments. Let’s see how many different endings I can get! I’ll pick my favorite and let you, my viewers know which one is my favorite. Remember to comment your URL so I can read some of your blogs, keep your comments appropriate,and no texting short cuts please. Thanks for reading and have fun commenting.

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98 comments

  1. I liked how you made the story suspenseful it made me want to read more about it to see what was going to happen at the end. I really enjoyed and hope you do more.

  2. I really love this story. I love the way you wrote it. l love first person writing. You get to know everything the character is thinking. You get know them better as a character. Thinks again for story you’ve got me hooked

  3. I really liked your story because of all of the things that you said in the beginning and how it cam in to play at the end.

  4. Hello, Emily! I really enjoyed how you kept me wanting to know more with your post. There were so many interesting details, which is great! Where did you get your inspiration for this post?

    1. Thank you so much! I’m not really for sure where I got the inspiration to do this post. I kind of just went with what my mind said! I like coming up with stories so I guess that could be my inspiration!

  5. Emily great job on making the story so suspenseful love the way you made it. You made me feel like I was acutely there with you.

    1. Thank you so much! A Triple A is an emergency road side assistants company, but it also does other things such as traveling.

    1. Thank you so much! No this is not a true story and they ran away from home because the felt like their parents were mistreating them.

  6. I love your story! You made it so interesting with so many details! What inspired you to make a post about this?

  7. I like your story and Also was that based of of a true story? I like the cliff hanger you left to! The picture goes great with the story.

  8. Hello Emily! i liked your blog post, i like the way it made my feel like i was there as you were telling it. keep up the awesome blogs

  9. I love how suspenseful your story is! Really keeps me on edge waiting to see whats going to happen. What was your inspiration when writing this?

  10. I like your story, it is very interesting. Is this based on something that really happened.? Why did your characters choose to rub away from home?

    1. Thank you! No this story is not based off a real thing that happened. The characters ran away from home because they felt like their parents were mistreating them.

  11. The way you ended this story was very exciting and suspenseful. Is there any reason that you made a story like this? Have you ever experienced something like this before?

    1. Thank you so much! The reason I made my story like this is because I love suspenseful books! No I have never experienced anything like this before.

    1. Thank you so much! I will be sure to check out you story very soon! Thanks for leaving your URL so I can go directly to the story!

  12. Your story was great i can’t wait to see what others put as the ending of the story. Keep up the good work!

  13. This story had me hooked from the beginning, I’ve been lost before but never in that situation. This really left me hanging.

  14. I love how the story left me in suspense. I would love to know more about it. Cliff hangers make every story interesting.

  15. Great story! Truly suspenseful and intriguing, maybe instead of having the readers finish the ending, let’s hear how the story ends in your perspective!

  16. Great story! I like how you put the escaped prisoner in it to make it more suspenseful. Also when the car broke down, really nice story!

  17. This is a very good story, you used very much detali, I like when she thought about the aproching car, knowing it could be the prisoner. Did you know ketucky is a big valley? Are you going to finish it yourself?

    1. Thank you so much! I had no clue Kentucky was a big valley! I might write a part two to the story but I’m not for sure yet.

  18. I really love this story. I love the way you wrote it. l love first person writing. You get to know everything the character is thinking. You get know them better as a character. Thinks again for story you’ve got me hooked

  19. I loved how there was a lot of things that you don’t know that makes you want to keep reading! Good Job!

    1. Thank you so much! I’m not really for sure what made me start writing, but I usually write for my own enjoyment!

  20. Dear Mcdowell,
    I loved the story, it made me want to keep reading. Are you going to finish this story? I would love to read it.

  21. I really like your story. i like how you get the reader involved in your posts. I used to do this for one of my classes last year. Each day we had to do something like this. How do you think the story should end?

  22. Hi Emily,
    I enjoyed reading your story, it was a very good idea to let the viewers think of their own ending!
    Good job!
    From Summer, Australia.

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